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Sweet girl happily asleep
Warm and cosy
As she cuddles her teddy close
Innocent face of a peaceful girl’s sleep

Slowly she turns over,
Stretching her arms unaware,
Outside the gentle breeze rustles the leaves
And the sweet girl sleeps on

With the safe silence all around
This one girls dreams
About her favourite toy
And her very best friend.

Unaware the sun is risen
She lays warm in her bed
As the morning smell of dew
Fills the sunlit room

Slowly the sweet girl’s eye
Flutter open ever so lightly
And she looks around her peaceful room
Ready to take on another day.
©2003-2009 ~buffycrazycarls
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i actually had to write this for english, froma stimulus whihc was a black and white photo of a 7 year old girl alseep with toys all round her.
anyway i was really happy with the outcome

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The sibilants emphasise the breeze in the background, using such words as - Sweet; asleep; cosy; As; she; cuddles; close;
Innocent; peaceful; girl’s; sleep etc etc they ar all the way through the poem! It also gives the poem a sense of silence and remorse!
Alliteration of safe silence backs up the entire fact that she is safely asleep!
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there is nothing i can do do describe the way i feel..
proud, shocked, awe inspired, speechless...
a fave.
:iconguidinglight:
A very calming poem i think, nice, i like it.
:iconcelia69:
Woah nice work carls! It has a really nice feel to it, an optimistic feel. Beautiful work.
:icondruggedfairytale:
nice work

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:iconbuffycrazycarls:
hey thanx for the comment.
btw how did you find this, cuz i posted it ages ago. i'm not upset, just curious to know how you came across it

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:icondruggedfairytale:
i dont remember ohh i wanted to find a poem about a sweet girl or something and i came across yours in the DA search or something.

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